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Atlas Vengaboy
Posts : 166 Join date : 2012-08-27 Age : 28
| Subject: Valkeri Syr Mon Oct 08, 2012 6:07 pm | |
| Credit Goes to Boom For Pic Appearance
Height:5'11 Skin Tone: Slightly Grey Eye Color: Grey Hair Color: Light Grey Deity: Shar Age: 94 Sired Age: 31 Facial FeaturesSlightly Sunken Face Sharp Features Closely Shaven Shadowy Face ClothingLong Black Dress Coat- Decorated with silver trimming Black Dress Pants Well Cleaned Black Shoes White Crisp Undershirt InventorySteel Stilleto - Spoiler:
Rapier - Spoiler:
Bio: Short Story - Spoiler:
Valkeri Is a younger vampire, abandoned from his sirer who was killed by a Vampire hunter. Before that, he was brought to Jheran, the vampire haven. His new life began, working under a woman he did not know, nor did he really care to know at the time. He was content with his job and did not wish to endanger it. With a large population of vampires in Jheran and little humans to feed off of, slave trafficking was needed. The money good, but even better was the blood and the girls. This all had ended when his contacts began to dissapeer. With him being busy organizing the kidnappings and transportation out of smaller villages and even Surna, he was never in Jheran itself. This type of lifestyle had saved his life, ironically. Every single one of his contacts began to dissapeer, one day he received and returned a letter, the next day nothing, with a fresh supply of young girls and men to feed off of, he was forced to make a decision, risk the profit or risk his life. He decides to ditch all of his products except for one, a young girl in her mid-late teens, she was a daughter of a cattle farmer. She had been mesmerized by him as he watched her through her window at night from across the street. His vampiric seduction had grabbed ahold of her and could not be shaken.His interest in her, was simply an obedient slave that he can drink from freely if he ever feels the need to do so. He turned to his slaves, all which have heard his alias and seen his face. A mad grin is stretched across his face and slaughtered them all in front of the one girl, before moving off to Surna where he begins his new business.
Full Bio - Spoiler:
Born into a noble family, Darmor Calden was never without anything he wanted. He had money, girls, the clothes and the fancy house. His daily activities were those of a nobleman, including swordsmanship and horseback riding, not to mention lessons by his nanny in manners. He would attend balls, attend his father’s business meetings (To learn the trade) and help watch over the servants, flirting with the pretty girls when he had the chance. When he came around to his thirty first birthday, he was to take over the estate fully and run the family. His mother had passed away recently and his father was getting tired from old age. Darmor was happy, he no longer had any restraints (Which he had little of) and could direct the family in the direction he wanted. This all changed when he had hired a new servant, a woman, maybe a few years younger than him.
He was entranced by this woman’s beauty, the second he met her he had thought she was the one. Within the week of hiring her, he was back to his young self again, flirting her up and inviting her to his chambers for the night. When she had arrived, she had a different presence, some sort of dark feeling to her. He shrugged it off and continued the night. They drank and they slept until he woke up in the middle of the night with her straddling overtop of him. He smiled up at her and spoke up groggily, “Another round?” He laughed lightly and the woman swooped down upon his neck. He was frozen with fear and struggled to escape her grasp. She pinned his arms and legs until he felt too weak to move, his body began to turn a blank white; his blood no longer belonged to him. Just as he felt he was about to die, the girl bit her own hand and opened his mouth, pouring the blood from her own hand into his mouth. It felt warm to him a lost feeling from his bloodless cold body and within seconds, to his knowledge he had died.
The next night he had woken up in his chambers as if nothing happened, the sheets were cleaned of blood and he was still in his old pajamas, but something wasn’t right. His skin was grey and his canine’s much longer. Two figures were in the corner, one with bright yellow eyes, the other figure was tied up and gagged, it was one of his servants, one that he had probably flirted with as a young man. The yellow eyed figure called out to him “Awake sweetheart? I thought you would be hungry, so I brought you breakfast” she giggled lightly and he arose from his bed. He felt an unquenchable thirst and dove for the young girl, ignoring his old relationship with her. His canine’s pierced her neck and he began to drink uncontrollably. The girl’s artery explodes and begins to gush into his mouth, a dark crimson stream. It began to flow out of the corner’s of his mouth and dripped onto the ground. When he was finished, he felt powerful, the girl’s blood coursing through his body. He turned to the yellow eyed vampire and grinned madly.
“What is your named?” she asked the fresh vampire “Darmor Calden” he responded. “Wrong, you are now Valkeri Syr, my new brother. Welcome to the life of night.”
Valkeri grinned and smiled at her, he turned to the dried body behind him and wiped his mouth clean. “What’s next?” He asked her and walked over to a tall standing mirror against the wall near his dresser. He looked over his features, the once handsome nobleman, now even more handsome, but much, much darker. His skin was as grey as ash and his eyes were as white as snow. His face had sunken slightly, but to his own liking, his sharp features were much more visible, showing off his dark alluring shadows.
“We move to Jheran.”
Valkeri began his new life in the vampire sanctuary, leaving his estate behind but taking all of his valuables and family’s coffers. Nelenna Syr, the yellow eyed vampire had introduced him to a man, one supposedly in charge of the human trafficking, just below the supposed ring leader of the underground in Jheran. The man was much older and much more experienced than Valkeri, but he was willing to show him the ropes of the trade. Valkeri enjoyed his new position in life, he would have an unlimited supply of blood and a good source of income. Valkeri and Nelenna climbed their way up in the trade, running the transportation and planning the kidnappings of villagers in small towns and even in Surna. This continued for sixty years until Nelenna returned with one of the shipments to Jheran. Valkeri waited a week for her to return and even sent a courier to look for her. The courier never returned and he began to worry. He had twelve fresh slaves with him and four vampires that were working under him at the time. His mind was quickly made and barked out orders to the rest of the vampires.
“Kill them all, leave the girl alive.”
They followed his orders and slaughtered them all, drinking like madmen and tearing out their throats. The one girl, maybe only seventeen or eighteen was left alone. She had previously been allured by Valkeri’s charm and was obedient to his every command. He liked this and decided to keep her as his backup food source and a source of entertainment. He and his workers moved into a large apartment, paying with their advanced payments and Valkeri’s old family fortune. The young girl was chained in the basement of the building, but despite chaining her up, Valkeri took good care of her. He fed her food and water, allowed her to bathe and even bought her clothes. (Will finish the rest in a bit, probally another one or two paragraphs)
Attributes - Quote :
- There is the infamous Vampire's Gaze, a powerful trait that allows any Vampire, upon making direct eye contact, to seduce, terrify, or confuse. Vampire's Gaze allows the Vampire to place powerful suggestions or vivid images in the victim's mind to achieve the desired effect, although the skill is greatly diminished should the victim know the truth about the Vampire's nature. There is Night's Embrace, which allows any Vampire to vanish from sight for a time at night; and Shroud of Lies, an ability that allows the Vampire to shield his or herself from the adverse affects of the sun for so long as they can maintain concentration
Journeyman Swordsman- With years of experience, undead strength and proper training as a child, Valkeri is able to defeat most men in a sword fight.
Last edited by Atlas on Sun Aug 25, 2013 1:01 am; edited 13 times in total (Reason for editing : Cause I can) | |
| | | Beans Scrub
Posts : 27 Join date : 2012-09-06 Age : 27 Location : America
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Mon Oct 08, 2012 11:48 pm | |
| Obviously it is still heavily WIP. It seems nice. It sticks pretty close to the lore. I may even think about making one, not sure yet. | |
| | | BooM Archmage
Posts : 629 Join date : 2012-02-22 Age : 29 Location : Paradise City, Florida
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Tue Oct 09, 2012 1:16 am | |
| I'm going to wait for the WIP to be lifted but my descission is HEAVILY leaning to no. | |
| | | Munroe Tryhard
Posts : 602 Join date : 2012-02-06
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Tue Oct 09, 2012 5:15 am | |
| After speaking to Atlas at length about this character, I had hoped it would be a little more detailed. Keep working on this.
You could also get away with removing the "top secret goals" section. In fact, I think removing that would make the character page better overall. | |
| | | Beans Scrub
Posts : 27 Join date : 2012-09-06 Age : 27 Location : America
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Tue Oct 09, 2012 5:25 am | |
| - Munroe wrote:
- After speaking to Atlas at length about this character, I had hoped it would be a little more detailed. Keep working on this.
You could also get away with removing the "top secret goals" section. In fact, I think removing that would make the character page better overall. I completely agree and I really want to know how this character would interact with others. Yeah, he wants blood, but every Vampire does. Go into detail about how he acts with his prey and the sort. I know this is still WIP, but I am sure you can expound on more than what you have. Also, with his abilities, put more depth to them. I would think after reading the lore on the Vampires that he would have more going for him. Remember he is also rather young, keep that in mind. I would think that a Vampire at a young age would need to feed more and that possibly he would go into frenzy much more often, considering he is simply too young to realize the blood consumption that he would need. Plus, if he were a glutton, that would go more toward personality. I would believe from what I have roleplayed in the past that a young Vampire when feeding would consume a large amount of blood. Sometimes killing. But this is different. I could ask Pat if I could more in depth of the Vampires, such as clans.. and establish some knowledge on the younger and elder Vampires. Alright, I am done, if you guys want to shape up my knowledge be my guest. I don't take offense. :3 | |
| | | Munroe Tryhard
Posts : 602 Join date : 2012-02-06
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Tue Oct 09, 2012 5:33 am | |
| He isn't part of a "clan," unless the cabal of vampires in Jheran could be defined as such. I don't think he would have to feed more than once a day, but he probably wouldn't want to feed less often than that, or risk going into a frenzy. Don't worry too much about his abilities in frenzy, because that's an animalistic state of mind that will draw way too much attention and get him executed just like that thrope recently.
I would be interested to hear Pat's opinion, since he actually wrote the vampire lore. | |
| | | Beans Scrub
Posts : 27 Join date : 2012-09-06 Age : 27 Location : America
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Tue Oct 09, 2012 5:50 am | |
| I wouldn't mess his lore up, I would probably add more about it. I believe age plays an important role in Vampires. | |
| | | Atlas Vengaboy
Posts : 166 Join date : 2012-08-27 Age : 28
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Tue Oct 09, 2012 5:59 am | |
| It was just a joke for the time, I wrote it at 3:30 in the morning, Im going to have a much longer bio and much more description on him, I just have my ideas down for the time | |
| | | Atlas Vengaboy
Posts : 166 Join date : 2012-08-27 Age : 28
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Tue Oct 09, 2012 6:56 am | |
| Part of the full bio added | |
| | | BooM Archmage
Posts : 629 Join date : 2012-02-22 Age : 29 Location : Paradise City, Florida
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Tue Oct 09, 2012 8:04 am | |
| It's an interesting concept and I'm going to wait for the RP on the server to judge this character. | |
| | | Munroe Tryhard
Posts : 602 Join date : 2012-02-06
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Tue Oct 09, 2012 8:28 am | |
| Much better. Like BooM said, though, I want to see how this is RPed. | |
| | | Atlas Vengaboy
Posts : 166 Join date : 2012-08-27 Age : 28
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Wed Oct 10, 2012 7:10 am | |
| If im missing any information, minus the two paragraphs, let me know and I will add it. | |
| | | Venom OPS Administrator
Posts : 504 Join date : 2012-08-17 Location : America
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Wed Oct 10, 2012 8:56 am | |
| THIS FUCKING GIF ATLASI LOVE YOU | |
| | | noodle Monthly Bather
Posts : 334 Join date : 2012-06-09 Location : Surna, Sanctimonia
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Thu Oct 11, 2012 10:18 am | |
| Ive seen Atlas' other vampire RP and I was impressed. So, I think I will accept | |
| | | BooM Archmage
Posts : 629 Join date : 2012-02-22 Age : 29 Location : Paradise City, Florida
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Fri Oct 19, 2012 8:01 am | |
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| | | Atlas Vengaboy
Posts : 166 Join date : 2012-08-27 Age : 28
| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Mon Aug 12, 2013 12:39 pm | |
| I just realized this never got accepted/ whatever | |
| | | Black Banana Party Giant Scrub
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| Subject: Re: Valkeri Syr Sat Aug 24, 2013 7:05 pm | |
| - Atlas wrote:
- I just realized this never got accepted/ whatever
This is finished? | |
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