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PostSubject: Failed Suggestion   Sat Sep 15, 2012 12:03 pm

Just, yeah.


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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Sat Sep 15, 2012 12:04 pm

When done The Followers of Tempus will seem very identical to the Greek Spartans but I intend to keep it following the lore.
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Sat Sep 15, 2012 1:07 pm

God can an admin please fix my F(Bleep)ing BB code?
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Sat Sep 15, 2012 2:48 pm

*Talibarian

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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Sun Sep 16, 2012 12:14 pm

MOTHER F***ing BB CODE RAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Sun Sep 16, 2012 2:12 pm

look, if this came out of a primitive place, it'd make more sense, I guess, but when it comes to full scale war, people rely on guns and artillery, especially if we're talking about Talibar, a nation that was formerly the leading power of the world. It may not be technologically forward anymore but they certainly wouldn't be relying on spears and infantry formations to win battles. Even the newly made goblin nation has their own arquebus rifles.

I hate to be a downer, but, this doesn't fit the setting... at least, not from that region. You could try looking for a more traditional and primitive region, not Talibar. I don't know about the Vale.
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Mon Sep 24, 2012 1:00 pm

*Nudges as many people as possible* Hey, this is some good shit.
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Mon Sep 24, 2012 3:49 pm

not very original or creative tbh. anyone can make a group of people that fight because they can.

see; pycheko
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Tue Sep 25, 2012 9:47 am

Blitz, these people have devoted their lives to fighting and military training and using only close combat weapons, something many people are not willing to do. I may add more stuff later on going into more details about their training, but this is no small camp of 12 guys whaking at a practice dummy with sticks all day.
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Tue Sep 25, 2012 10:05 am

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After about 2 centuries of constant military dedication, The Followers of Tempus have become an ultimate fighting force, with almost unstopable formations. TFOT have great plans in the near future to be known all over Aeria as the the world's best military. Their Armor is not dedicated to one form, in fact it is currently known that they have over 15 different helmets and 22 different shields. They're form of combat is melee, thinking that bows are "weapons for cowards" because they kill from a distance.

The Followers of Tempus were first formed by a group of 73 Men and Women of the Sarkun and 21 Men and Women from Vale. both agreed that the worlds military is very weak, and believed they could make an entire city that would be dedicated to military training. Shortly after the city of Surna was founded, this dream was made reality, The Followers of Tempus became one of the world greatest military, with the exception that it took them about 200 years.

Sorry, but they're not "the world's greatest military" if they don't use any form of ranged weapon. They would get slaughtered against pretty much anyone. Also, I agree with Blitz in that this lacks originality- I can name at least two groups in the setting that are like this, the difference being that there's more to them than just "they are the best fighters!" Which brings me to my next issue, which is that this is sorely lacking in detail. Why did these men and women get together and decide to form this group? Why do they fight, and who do they fight? What's the point of this group?

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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Tue Sep 25, 2012 9:47 pm

If you can't contribute anything of value to the community by making half-assed posts, at least take other people's advice. The admin team is trying to help you make your posts into detailed ones, but you have to listen to them and not bail out the second they leave any criticism.

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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Wed Sep 26, 2012 8:42 am

Venom OPS wrote:
If you can't contribute anything of value to the community by making half-assed posts, at least take other people's advice. The admin team is trying to help you make your posts into detailed ones, but you have to listen to them and not bail out the second they leave any criticism.

Yes. This is exactly what we are looking for.
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Wed Sep 26, 2012 10:13 am

Yes yes, and I do, but I never get any advice. All I get is, why the hell did you make this, this sucks, you can't make decent posts.
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Wed Sep 26, 2012 10:30 am

We have some pretty high standards, particularly when it comes to matters of lore. All this boils down to is a desire to see you do better. But sometimes we can get carried away and make harsh statements, and I apologize for that.

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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Wed Sep 26, 2012 10:31 am

Kain wrote:
You could try looking for a more traditional and primitive region, not Talibar. I don't know about the Vale.
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Which brings me to my next issue, which is that this is sorely lacking in detail. Why did these men and women get together and decide to form this group? Why do they fight, and who do they fight? What's the point of this group?

Yeah, looks like nobody has even bothered with giving advice.

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PostSubject: Re: Failed Suggestion   Thu Sep 27, 2012 10:04 pm

well, let's give the kid a break. there's no need to be harsh here.
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