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PostSubject: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 11:22 am

Biography: Ro' Ka (HIs real name being Gregory Diligin) was just a normal kid.He had dreams of being a scholar when he was older. But at the age of 15, he found a strange Warhammer glowing with a strange black aura, this was somwhere near midnight.
The nexthing he remembered was waking up somwhere in the moutains between Vale and Sanctimonia, feeling very weak with the warhammer in his right hand. He has lost all of his memory, only knowing that his name is Ro' Ka. What is happening to him is a curse that comes from the Warhammer that makes him an extremely powerful warrior, but this power comes with a toll. He can only use this power once a day for only a few minutes. Using the power for as little as 1 minute can cause terrible damage to his body. Even so, he is cursed to defeat all those who stand in his way until a warrior of a great good rises up and defeats him in combat. He warns anyone who he meets of this power, hoping that one day he can stop hurting people. He is willing to die to acomplish that. He has also learned that he can only use his power once
a day, but it is not his decision when he can use it. He has also learned that the cursed erased his memory, and he thinks that when he is defeated his memoery will return to him. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________
Age: 24
Gender: Male
Race: Human(Cursed but Human)
Birthplace: Vale
Diety: N/A
Equipment: Cursed Warhammer(Only usable when transformed)
Demonic Armor(Only Usable when transformed)
Abilities: To transform into an Extremely Powerful warrior(Only Usable once a day and it is not a will)
Allignment: Neutral (Chaotic Evil When Transformed)
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 1:35 pm

Eh hem, this app is ready for judgement by the all powerful admins and anyone else who gives a hoot.
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 1:58 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 3:43 pm

im not sure how to put this while being nice to your feelings...
its much like pho's video
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 3:49 pm

BooM wrote:
im not sure how to put this while being nice to your feelings...
its much like pho's video

:'( you hurt my feelings, that video is mean.
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 4:01 pm

This just isn't something that would work in this RP. We don't have a bunch of powerful heroes lined up to knock this guy down every single day when he transforms. This whole concept is too combat-oriented. And it's vague. "Extremely powerful warrior", what does that mean? Can he level buildings in one strike, or is he just really good?

His bio doesn't answer any of these questions. It doesn't state how he found the warhammer, or his "demonic armor". I'm not even sure what you mean by demonic armor, but it sounds overpowered.

It's nothing personal, but I can't accept this character in its current state. If you're determined to carry this through approval, please work out all of these issues. Take a look at some of the accepted characters if you need a place to start.

Oh, and Phoenix's video is actually what happens after the approval process

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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 4:36 pm

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This just isn't something that would work in this RP. We don't have a bunch of powerful heroes lined up to knock this guy down every single day when he transforms. This whole concept is too combat-oriented. And it's vague. "Extremely powerful warrior", what does that mean? Can he level buildings in one strike, or is he just really good?

His bio doesn't answer any of these questions. It doesn't state how he found the warhammer, or his "demonic armor". I'm not even sure what you mean by demonic armor, but it sounds overpowered.

It's nothing personal, but I can't accept this character in its current state. If you're determined to carry this through approval, please work out all of these issues. Take a look at some of the accepted characters if you need a place to start.

Oh, and Phoenix's video is actually what happens after the approval process

Well to answer your questions, first off he found the Warhammer while he was walking through the woods to get a good look at the moon in a cave. Second, Extremely Powerful, meaning that there are few that can even cause harm to him, hes somewhere in between he can knock back a guy 10 feet and smashing into a cobblestone wall. Third, Demonic armor, thats when I kinda got off track and I couldn't think of the word I wanted, I would say like... thick plate armor that glows with a black aura. I can work on this over time this is like the rough draft of it, I can keep working on this, make him weaker.
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 5:00 pm

No, I would honest just move on to another character idea and form on that. Having an overpowered demon like character like this is not what Surna needs right now, nor will, I think, he will ever.

While the idea sounds cool, it's just not plausible for a real character design for this RP. I would highly suggest creating a new character if you are not satisfied with the one you currently have. I'm not even sure there is lore for this kind of situation but I suggest you talk to an admin before asking for a character even close to this one.
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 5:49 pm

BooM wrote:
While the idea sounds cool, it's just not plausible for a real character design for this RP.

Simple as, really.

There's a lot of ways to fit into the RP, but a shitload of power from the starting block is never a good one. Consider a character who whilst perhaps more conventional or more able to mingle with other characters and plots (and the suchlike), is still interesting and full of depth.

or something like that :3
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 6:26 pm

I'm afraid this is not going to pass. As others have mentioned, nothing personal. But it's asking too much for too little. New people usually are not handed this much power before they've achieved some prestige. And even then, this character would be questionable.

I suggest that you look at the guides and other approved characters and try to figure out why they were approved. In addition, you would be best off to start with a normal and fairly low-powered character and work from there.
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 6:32 pm

Oh, and on a really minor note, you don't need to add that it's an app. It's automatically that when you post in approval, really. Character pages are convenient like that, a basket to put in all the eggs you want checked.
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 6:57 pm

In my very tired yet honest opinion, I see nothing good out of this character. Okay, let's take this from the top. He clearly is an overpowered, Hulk-like character, with little-to-no originality or thought put into him. If he really forgets the first fifteen years of his life, wouldn't he be a little more concerned about retracing his steps, or does beating people up at overpowered and super-duper speeds make-up for his life being gone? If anything, instead of going around, beating people to a pulp, couldn't he just go to someone who would know something about something strange such as this? I don't know... Maybe to help him? To get rid of it? To replenish his memories with a strong mage's help?

My God. Did you really say he can send someone flying back ten feet and into a cobblestone wall? Honestly. So, not only would the person survive being thrown into the wall, but they'd go through it? The last time I checked, only Superman could survive something like that, or at least Spiderman would shed a few tears. But, that's just an example since I can't think of much-else to compare it to.

So, back to the bio... Wow, oh wow. Do I have some questions. How does a weakened child, with a heavy hammer, no survival skills (since he wanted to become a scholar, I don't expect him to be super-duper muscular or have knowledge on surviving), and no clue who he is... Survive getting down from the mountains? Maybe I'm bring crazy here, but I'd have thought the mountains and all forget fun stuff from nature, like hypothermia and frostbite kills children. I mean, that's what I learned through my life.

I'll leave you folks with one final thought, to look at. Actually, wait. It's my definition of a roleplaying word. Powergaming, in terms of a mere player. Powergaming, the ability to give your character skills, tallents, weaponry, or armor, that is used to take an unfair advantage, over one person or a group of people, that based off of the lore, canon or other meaning of natural roleplay, is in the upper-hand of the invididual. These include both physical and mental types, since powergaming intelligence or a specific skill, is still counted as powergaming.

Thank you and goodnight.
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Mon Sep 03, 2012 9:37 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Tue Sep 04, 2012 3:10 am

Thanks for your contribution, Psyche.
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PostSubject: Re: Hellknight Ro' Ka[This is an App]   Tue Sep 04, 2012 3:55 am

PhoenixRhapsody wrote:

Thank you so much for providing me a link to this.
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