Posts : 28 Join date : 2012-09-10 Age : 27 Location : Newfoundland, Canada
Subject: Shazad Namir Tue Sep 25, 2012 12:00 pm
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Age:8 years old Gender:Male Race:Human [Sidan] Birthplace:Seljuk Deity:None Occupation:None
Biography Chapter 1: The Curse of the Noble's child
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Shazad was born in the Nation of Sida. In a Noble family. under the name Namir. Shazad was at first. a very happy and simple child. He had money, and he could easily get what he wanted. His friend was a Teddy bear which he named Nasheed. He received the Teddy bear one year on his birthday. To be precise his fourth birthday from his mother, Who was the only family contact he had essentially. He had no siblings nor aunts nor uncles. His father was away most of the time. Either performing some brave feat to boost his Ego. or on a buisness venture to gain more money, to try and make up for the time he was away with gifts to his son Shazad He loved his son. But he was never home to be a father. He had been away so much. Shazad only had vague memories of his father. Most of the time it was only him visiting Shazad's mother, And he proceeding to go to bed. Most of the time Shazad would be asleep, But when he was awake. or was awoken by the noise. His father would smile at him then go to bed. This was his Curse. He never truly had two loving parents.
Chapter 2:A sad truth
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Fast forward a year. Shazad is looking out his window at some children playing. He asks his mother "Momma. Why can't I play with the other Children?" His mother replied "It's for your safety Honey.". But Shazad wanted to play with the children and so he went out. Sneaking past the guards outside. Bringing his Teddy bear Nasheed with him. When he arrived at the area where the kids played. He inquired "Can I play with you guys?" They all looked at him. And realising who he was. Instantly they hated him. Looking at him with hateful eyes. One kid said "Run back home to mommy teddy boy" and the crowd laughed. Shazad mumbled "But I just wanted to play.." One tall kid walked up to Shazad. Shazad thought he was going to be friendly to him, however it was the opposite. The tall kid took Nasheed from him and started to rip up the Teddy. Laughing as he did it. Shazad tried to get Nasheed back, reaching for it and reaching for it. but he could reach up high enough. and before his very eyes his friend Nasheed had been reduced to scraps and stuffing.Shazad could'nt help but cry before the remains of his friend. The crowd simply just laughed at him "Awh Teddy boy is crying!" One exclaimed and they all laughed more. before all walking away to play somewhere else. A guard came from around the corner "Shazad boy. What are you doing here? Come we must return you home to your mother. She is worried about you" and so he returned. He never asked to play with the other children again
Chapter 3: Breaking point
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Advance 2 years. Shazad is now 7 years of age. His former cheerful attitude disappeared two years ago in the even of the children destroying Nasheed his Teddy bear. Which he never told his mother about.His birthday is in a week.but his mother is Gravely ill. The previous year his father aswell had been defeated by a dune worm. He walked into his mother room. To talk to her "Momma. Are you alright?" Shazad inquired. His mother replied weakly "Yes Honey. I'm alright. Come please hold my hand" Shazad did as he was told. wrapping his hands around his mothers hand. His mother said weakly "Honey..I have to leave soon.." Shazad asked "Momma where are you going?" His mothers hand grew colder. as she said "I'm taking a trip..I probably..wont...be coming back...Please....Be happy...Don't..Cry...Honey..." And as she said those words. Her hand lost grip. her eyes closing. Shazad asked "Momma?" But to no response. He exclaimed "Momma wake up! C'mon this isn't funny Momma!" But his mother didint wake up. Shazads eyes filled with tears. As with one last sad question "Momma?" and to no response. He burst into tears over his mother. In a hope that she would wake. He waited there the whole day. But his mother never woke. A servant came into the room and told Shazad it was time for bed. The servant tucked him in as if Pitying him. and left the room, turning off the lights.The following morning a funeral was held.
Chapter 4: He who runs away from the sword of dispair shant heal from the wounds in which it inflicts
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After the Funeral Recession. Shazad returned to the empty house His eyes filling with tears. He had never felt so alone before...He could'nt stand to stay in the home, so he fled the house. taking a rucksack of food and water with him. running to the port. as he saw a boat there earlier on the way home. He arrived at the harbour as the people started to board. He went into the crowd of people. Hiding under the tall men and women. and went down into the inside of the ship. where he stowed away. He wasn't thinking. Filled with Sadness and regret he left with the ship. His birthday passed on the trip. as he arrived at a port the day after. as he left the ship he was spotted by one of the crew. Who asked him where his parents were. But he could'nt understand him. As he was speaking in common. Which he knew nothing of. He just started running. He knew he wasn't supposed to speak to anyone on the ship. Or they might find out how he got on, and so he ran and ran from the man. who chased after him. He hid in the cart of one of the Trade Caravans Which he waited in. He was so drowzy from the lack of sleep on the ship. that he fell asleep in the cart. When he awoke he was on the road. Still having no idea where he was. He was scared. He wanted his mother to come and comfort him. but she could'nt. Because she had passed away. He remained silent. His eyes dripping tears slightly. He waited in the Caravan cart. When he was hungry he ate something that was in the cart quietly. about a day later the Caravan came to a stop. He climbed out of the Caravan cart. and snuck away into the town. The town he arrived in was Surna (Go figure). Though he didin't know it.
Skills: No notable skills as of yet
Languages: Sidan
Inventory:Slate gray robe. White desert scarf. Brown shoes(See character picture)
Hair color:Crimson
Hairstyle:Short unkempt hair (See character picture)
Eye color: Brown
Allignment: Neutral (Leans strongly towards [Good Due to recent events)
Last edited by Toasters on Thu Sep 27, 2012 1:11 pm; edited 3 times in total
I think the backstory is kind of interesting. There's not enough children in Surna, let alone one like this. I love the way your character looks as a whole. I think he's adorable to an extent, and look forward to seeing what's gonna happen to him. You get an accept from me 100%
With all the evil things happening in the town, the likelihood of a child being allowed to stay in town is none. The watch would undoubtedly have him taken to another town for his own safety.
All children are without means to protect themselves.
Pedobear.
If he ever gets a chance to say something, it will be discredited because he is a child.
Seriously, this makes about as much sense as using knifes instead of feathers in a tickle fight.
With all the evil things happening in the town, the likelihood of a child being allowed to stay in town is none. The watch would undoubtedly have him taken to another town for his own safety.
All children are without means to protect themselves.
Pedobear.
If he ever gets a chance to say something, it will be discredited because he is a child.
Seriously, this makes about as much sense as using knifes instead of feathers in a tickle fight.
With all the evil things happening in the town, the likelihood of a child being allowed to stay in town is none. The watch would undoubtedly have him taken to another town for his own safety.
All children are without means to protect themselves.
Pedobear.
If he ever gets a chance to say something, it will be discredited because he is a child.
Seriously, this makes about as much sense as using knifes instead of feathers in a tickle fight.
Children are not always automatically denied (Jolie-Astrella Violetta Abrielle). I don't like them, personally, because they're either shallow and immature or like a Mary Sue who can do anything as well as or better than an adult can. This one in particular is a bit clichéd. His parents never loved him, he never had any friends, his family died, boo hoo hoo. But whatever.
Not grounds for denial...
Yes, unless you're an extremely good RPer.
Yes.
I don't know about that. The evil stuff is mostly going on behind the scenes. The goblin aggression has also come to a halt, meaning the town is likely much safer.
Also not grounds for denial. RP isn't just about combat.
I sincerely hope we never have to worry about that.
Not necessarily grounds for denial.
Last edited by Munroe on Tue Sep 25, 2012 2:21 pm; edited 2 times in total
I was harsh. I apologize. This is the only one you will get. Ever.
Munroe Tryhard
Posts : 602 Join date : 2012-02-06
Subject: Re: Shazad Namir Mon Oct 08, 2012 4:57 am
Denied. This character thinks and acts like an adult, which pushes it into Mary Sue territory. That, and a couple of the reasons Phoenix listed, are my reasons for denial.
